The main problem I see with this is that I feel like it goes by way too quick, and not just that it's not finished. Each of the parts, I think, could be longer so that the builds up with more suspense.
The song builds up well, from the quiet intro to the drums coming in, to the guitar (or guitar-esque sounding instrument, it's hard to tell whether it's guitar or synth, which isn't a problem) and then the end.
But, on the topic of drums, I'm not so sure about the rhythm that you have. I can't put my finger on what exactly is bothering me about it, but it just doesn't seem like it fits with the feel and the rhythm of the melody(s). Maybe keep just the kick drum and add some cymbals? I don't know, I'm no drummer, but mess around with it.
However, I do like your melodies, especially the guitar (or guitar-esque sounding instrument) part.
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Ah damn... the fact that "it goes by way too quick" is a problem since in the meanwhile I extended the song (it's around 2:30-3:00 long now). Perhaps it feels "quick" because there's no space for a transition (yet).
Well, that "synth" is supposed to be the closest thing to an electric guitar. Unfortunately I don't know of a better way to create a pseudo-realistic e-guitar in FL studio, but hopefully it won't matter much to everyone else as well.
I didn't expect the drums to be bothersome, tbh. Hmm... I'll have to relisten to my song a bunch of times now... Perhaps it's the snare's fault (the one in the last part of the song)? My intension was to give the beat diversity in order to make it sound more dynamic and interesting to the listener: Beat repetitiveness is a bitch ^__^.
Anyway, thank you very much [insert_name_here] ^__^
I think the transition between the opening melody and the 'city music," as joshsouza described it, was a bit drastic. I recommending working that out a bit. I suggest either creating a bridge or changing the 'city music' to be more rhythmically similar to the other part.
Also, it seemed a bit repetitive. It's a calm piece, which is nice, but I think you should have made slight alterations to the two parts as the song progressed to build it up.
Thanks for your review!
I totally get where you're coming from. This one seemed to be a bit rushed compared to what I usually do, but I appreciate your feedback.
I love the bass riff that you use throughout the song. It's one of those riffs that almost seems offbeat, but it isn't. I also like how you took a break from that riff and then brought it back at the end of the song.
However, I feel as though there should be more than that one riff linking the end to the beginning. Because the song is so long, I would suggest taking one of your other riffs and making it a kind of chorus.
Also, I recommend arranging your riffs and melodies in a way that creates more of a feeling of suspense. And because of the length, I suggest adding an into (which kind of goes along with the building suspense suggestion).
i need to make a strait hardcore bass song and send it to you lol, i'll do the same offbeat bass style. i was going for light hearted, so i don't know about suspense, meh could work out good though. you are t=right about the song length lol, i can never get that right, i add to much. thanks for the helpful review buddy :)
I like how the slow intro changes into the intense melody. It really adds to that dark emphasis that the song has.
The whole piece, overall, is pretty awesome. The melodies and the rhythms really compliment each other. I like how the song builds and builds until the end. The brief pauses in between each rhythmical change only add to it.
My suggestion would be to put something along the lines of the intro at the end.
Thanks! I was kinda anxious to end it when I did, so I might work on improving it later.
Thanks for the review!
My only complaint is that I think that after the "prepare for launch" part, you should have gone back into a heavy rhythm.
Thanks for the review. That does sound like a good idea. I'll work with it and trial and error some stuff.
I like the bass feel.
Im sure you did. :)
Jeff, I didn't know this song was by you.
Thumbs up. :3
Oh Katie =3
Nice and well put.
Thumbs up there, sweetheart, but could use some effort.
DICKS UP BUT IT COULD USE SOME LUBE!
Very nice and very well done.
I love how you intertwined the vocals in there. Quite professional. Keep up the good work. :D
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